Greetings, @offia66 !
You relate a story that has occurred in history at times, also literature has dealt with it with some frequency. Your story is presented in a very straightforward manner.
We often provide feedback to writers who are just getting started. The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.
Hope you continue to write and engage with the other writers in the community.
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Thanks for the review
I will read through the resources
you provided. Thanks a lot