Thanks for sharing this intense Narnia story in The Ink Well, @ubani1. Your stories show great imagination, and are entertaining as well. This one shows that prejudice and systems of class exist everywhere, even in fantasy worlds. And you showed that very well.
One thing we urge you to think about is how to make sure that you resolve the story conflicts you introduce. In this one, we find that the brother has embezzled money and wants to use the house as collateral. This is not resolved. The narrator falls in love with the faun, and this line too is left unresolved. The story is still strong and a good read! But our tip for you is that readers will enjoy your stories more if you complete each conflict with some kind of resolution. It's an important storytelling skill, and is something readers expect. Otherwise, they are left feeling unsatisfied at the story's end.
Good luck and keep writing!