I need to find more ways to describe actions from the eyes of a person, rather than saying what they're doing.
Right! I struggle with that too because I think there's moderation in everything. Even something that becomes too descriptive become boring. If you're interested do check out his work, it's pretty helpful when you're looking for an input for a editing.
PS: sorry just got back here, I am currently moving in between home + hospital :')
That's true, yeah being bogged down in description and details can impact the flow of the writing just as much. I'll be sure to check it out. I have two of Joseph Campbells books, 'the heros jounrey,' and 'the hero with a thousand faces'
They're worth looking into too, he draws similarities between all successful stories and even myths from around the world and the connections between all elements that make for good stories.
Oh, I'm sorry to hear that, are you okay?