I realize she’s new to the game but she better learn to do the plug walk if she wants to do the plug talk!
Great story, maybe a little more descriptive on the saucy parts would go a long way in keeping the reader.....engaged
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Thank you for the vote and follow! We really appreciate your feedback as well. More juicy details are always worth another consideration. The genre here is comedy porn, so the focus tends to be a little less on the sex and more on the jokes, but I can't see why we shouldn't sauce it up a bit. You're not the first to mention the critique. ;)